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This page was the notebook for collective copy-editing of Targets of Opportunity, based on the April 20, 2010 PDF that went out to everyone who paid the ransom or pre-ordered the hardback. It is preserved here as a memorabilium.
Table of Contents
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Recommended pattern of submissions
Page <page number>
PDF reading: <quote>
Should be: <corrected text, correction highlighted if not immediately obvious>
Submissions
Page 2
PDF reading: DELTA GREEN: (Title Bar)
Should be: DELTA GREEN (note the lack of colon)
Page 3
PDF reading: The Cult of Transcedence 164
Should be: The Cult of Transcendence 164
Page 5
PDF reading: carefully-catalogued species
Should be: carefully catalogued species
Page 6
PDF reading: Delta Green was given official sanction in 1943
Should be: Delta Green was given official sanction in 1942
Page 7
PDF reading: …
and friendly inhabitants of the continent, and it certainly put a
crimp in any imperialistic plans the European powers might have
…
(note the bolding at the end of lines… many more instances on this page)
Should be:
and friendly inhabitants of the continent, and it certainly put a
crimp in any imperialistic plans the European powers might have
(Problem looks like it is due to how the map was overlayed or text was wrapped, as the bolding appears sometimes in the middle of letters and all coincide with the bounding box of the map image)
Page 8
PDF reading: matriarch of the Gaagáay Chíin-jáa
Should be: matriarch of the Gaagáay Chíin jáa
PDF reading: The ancient evil which had survived near-decimation at the hands of the Haida
Should be: Technically, if not colloquially, decimation is the death of one in ten. "near-extermination" might be more accurate.
Page 10
PDF Reading: she falls between the cracks of the floor in the Shaman’s house, and returns to the ocean
Should probably be: she falls between the cracks of the floor in the Shaman’s house and returns to the ocean
(How commas and 'and' are used together might arguably be a matter of personal style. However, in this case there is a clear chronological link across the sentence, so I suggest that the use of the comma is not appropriate.)
PDF reading: publicly-presented fables
Should be: publicly presented fables
Page 11
PDF reading: Failure costs 1D4 Hit Points of damage every two days withouIt is quite possible for a person to march out of a settlement and simply vanish.
Should be: end of first sentence missing.
Page 12
PDF reading: Unlike a rifle, a speargun attack can be dodged.
Should be: According to the latest set of Call of Cthulhu rules, rifle attacks can be dodged, and this is reflected in the Combat Options chapter.
Page 14
PDF reading: …the Black Cod Sheriff
Should be: The office of sheriff does not exist in Alaska. He should be the chief of police. (Numerous references to "sheriff" throughout the Black Cod chapter.)
Page 16
PDF reading: breaks a visistor’s two
Should be: breaks a visitor’s two
PDF reading:
Should be:
(Throughout the book, words like "Archeology" and "archeological" are spelled inconsistently, with or without "ae". Decide on one style.)
PDF reading: Sealaska owns owns extensive land
Should be: Sealaska owns extensive land
PDF reading: The Black Cod
grow learning this false version of their history alongside the truth.
Should be: The Black Cod
grow up learning this false version of their history alongside the truth.
(It seems that there is a word missing from the expression "grow up".)
PDF reading: Dominate spell was
always been enough
Should be: Dominate spell has
always been enough
Page 19
PDF reading: up in a court ofEven obtaining
Should be: ?? Text missing between "of" and "Even". Should probably be "of law. Even".
Page 22
PDF reading: Built around the resting place of the giant Deep One “He-Who-Swims-With-Corpses,”
Should be: The closing brackets are slightly out of place compared to the paragraph's alignment.
Page 23
PDF reading: locally as the “Widow,” this
Should be: locally as “the Widow,” this
(It appears that the definite article should be included.)
PDF reading: Stats for Old Mary, Attacks Claws (x2)
Should be: Is this correct? She is stated to have one hand unchanged, ie, she should only have one claw.
PDF reading: out at New Chaatl from
Should be: out at New Cha'atl from
Page 24
PDF reading: … a smiling, scaly, squat face with dead eyes and too many tKátl keeps apartments in Wrangell and Ketchikan and can often be found trolling such towns with a half-dozen “young” Black Cod goons in tow.
Should be: There seems to be some missing text in between "too many t" and "Kátl."
PDF reading: He is the face of the isolated Indians who “live out on that island.”
Should be: The closing brackets are slightly out of place compared to the paragraph's alignment.
Page 25
PDF reading: Legal Council
Should be: Legal Counsel
(occurs twice on this page)
PDF reading: Kildaaw
Should be: Kíldaaw
(Several occurrences on this page; needs to be corrected on p. 16 and p. 21 as well.)
PDF reading: Credit Rating and Law are listed in a fourth column that should not be there.
Should be: Reduce the number of columns to three and adjust layout accordingly.
Page 26
PDF reading: …sheriff
Should be: The office of sheriff does not exist in Alaska. He should be the chief of police.
PDF reading: …where they will be consumed and or worse
Should be: "and/or worse"
Page 28
PDF reading: …sheriff
Should be: The office of sheriff does not exist in Alaska. He should be the chief of police.
PDF reading: real alcohol- related crimes;
Should be: real alcohol-related crimes;
Page 29
PDF reading: Last paragraph before sub-chapter "The Call": "on the Black Cod’s hit list; or to end up as one of"
Should be: Missing end part of last sentence.
PDF reading: Only those who make it a point to poke around significantly
Should be: Only those who poke around extensively (odd phrasing, strained use of significantly)
Page 30
PDF reading: Through this means the Deep Ones have bred with nearly every type of advanced aquatic life, leading to odd hybrids throughout Earth’s oceans.
Should be: "Through these means […]"
(Comment by Iohannes: not an error; "means" as ="method" can be a singular noun. "The telephone is a means of communication." — Dictionary.com definition of "means")
Page 32-34
PDF reading: The Deep One Reproductive Element was first isolated by man at the YY-II facility in Arizona by a team of scientists in the employ of the Office of Naval Intelligence in the late 1970s.
Should be: The Deep One Reproductive Element was first isolated by man at the YY-II facility in New Mexico by a team of scientists in the employ of Majestic-12 in the late 1970s. (The YY-II facility was created by Majestic-12 at the Los Alamos base in New Mexico after the Roswell crash, see p.66 of Delta Green. As later text in Targets of Opportunity states that Majestic-12 "first encountered [the Deep One Reproductive Element] in the 1970s in the YY-II facility" (p.35), this is probably a typo.)
Page 32
PDF reading: are longer than an average human
Should possibly be: are longer than those of an average human
Page 33
PDF reading: Reccurring dreams.
Should be: Recurring dreams.
Page 34
PDF reading: " […] that discovery alone is worthy of a Nobel Prize."
Should or Could be: Often it makes no sense in referring to something being worthy of a Nobel prize, as there are a limited number of scientific areas where they are being awarded. However, in this case, it actually does make sense as there is a Nobel prize in "Physiology or Medicine". The other categories are Physics, Chemistry, Peace and Literature. There is also a prize in Economic Sciences in memory of Nobel. My point is that I think it's worth spelling out, ie write "that discovery alone is worthy of the Nobel Prize in Physiology or Medicince". It might be a bit bulky and inelegant but it comes across as more credible.
PDF reading: But a conventional vaccine will likely be impossiOf course, the horrors of getting infected inflict a different kind of damage altogether.
Should be: Missing text between "impossi-" and "Of course."
Page 38
PDF reading: … any agent with a Cthulhu Mythos skill but who fails a Cthulhu Mythos roll could mistake this being for Great Cthulhu iThis creature is not a classic horror movie monster.
Should be: Probably "Great Cthulhu itself. This"
Page 40
PDF reading: not walk as much as to “bounce,”
Should be: not walk as much as “bounce,”
Page 41
PDF reading: In truth, this is part of the Black Cod “counteroffensive”
Should be: The closing brackets are slightly out of place compared to the paragraph's alignment.
PDF reading: The Council carefully prepares ceremonies and demonstrations of “traditional” techniques
Should be: The closing brackets are slightly out of place compared to the paragraph's alignment.
Page 44
PDF reading: trysts with Jennifer Gúusuu,
Should be: trysts with Jennifer Guúsuu,
Page 45
PDF reading: to the Gúusuu
Should be: to the Guúsuu
(Needs to be corrected twice on this page.)
Page 48
PDF reading: High school
Should be: High school
(The "l" in "school" shouldn't be bold.)
PDF reading: NaturalHistory(marine)
Should be: Natural History (marine)
Page 52
PDF reading: from Ludwig Prinn’s
Should be: from Ludvig Prinn’s
(Lovecraft consistently spells Prinn's given name as "Ludvig" with a "v". I don't know whether that is correct Flemish, though. "Ludvig" occurs later in the text, so whether "Ludvig" or "Ludwig" is chosen it needs to be consistent.)
PDF reading: Fredrich Von Junst
Should be: Friedrich von Junzt
(All instances of "Junst" need to be changed to "Junzt".)
PDF reading: Unausprechlichen
Should be: Unaussprechlichen
(All instances of Unausprechlichen need to be changed to Unaussprechlichen.)
Page 53
PDF reading: “their mother’s in the pool . .
. their mother’s in the pool.”
Should be: "their mother's in the pool… Their mother's in the pool"
PDF reading: feet, she has gotten to where
Should be: feet, she had gotten to where
Page 55
PDF reading: of the Taklamalkan Desert
Should be: of the Taklamakan Desert
PDF reading: to be a thousand of years old
Should be: to be a thousand years old
Page 56
PDF reading: the mystery of Ibrahim’s unnatural
Should be: the mystery of his unnatural
(There is no need to repeat Ibrahim's name, since it has already been mentioned in the same sentence and "his" can only refer to him.)
Page 57
PDF reading: “Dreams
in the Witchhouse.”
Should be: “Dreams
in the Witch House.”
PDF reading: The environment of the higher dimension
can be only be partially perceived by human
senses
Should be: The environment of the higher dimension
can be only partially perceived by human
senses
(Or possibly "The environment of the higher dimension can only be partially perceived by human senses")
PDF reading: knew that in that his immortality was a treasure that men would
Should be: knew that his immortality was a treasure that men would
Page 58
PDF reading: interested in the Disciples
Should be: interested in the Disciples'
PDF reading: Prinn already had already found his own
Should be: Prinn had already found his own
PDF reading: Higher Planein our world.
Should be: in our world.
Page 59
PDF reading: …French has established
Should be: …French had established
PDF reading: …thought of the English
Should be: …thought of the British
PDF reading: …East Indian Company opium
Should be: …East India Company opium
PDF reading: Can V ang rebellion
Should be: Can Vang rebellion
Page 60
PDF reading: crossroads of world;
Should be: crossroads of the world;
PDF reading: …the British Colonial constabulary
Should be: …the British colonial constabulary
PDF reading: were able to
lay low and
Should be: were able to
lie low and
PDF reading: …Columbian drug traffickers
Should be: …Colombian drug traffickers
Page 61
PDF reading: Los Brujos were usually thought to be little more than a scary story that Mexican people smugglers told each other over cervesas and cocaine
Should be: Los Brujos were usually thought to be little more than a scary story that Mexican people smugglers told each other over cervezas and cocaine
PDF reading: elements of Santaria, Palo Mayombe, and Aztec ritual and Palo Mayombe.
Should be: elements of Santaria, Palo Mayombe, and Aztec ritual.
PDF reading: Officially, the Federales claim that Constanzo died when he ordered cult member Alvaro de Leon Valdez to shoot him and his lover martin Quintana Rodriguez rather than allow them to be taken by the police.
Should be: his lover Martin Quintana Rodriguez
PDF reading: Federales [several times]
Should be: Federales [without bolding]
Page 62
PDF reading: his organization, the Guadalajara Cartel broke up
Shoud be: his organization, the Guadalajara Cartel, broke up
PDF reading: Los Zetas [on one occasion]
Should be: Los Zetas [without bolding]
Page 63
PDF reading: because of there was a chance
Should be: because there was a chance
PDF reading: As they centuries have passed,
Should be: As the centuries have passed,
Page 64
PDF reading: Otherwise the might have started
Should be: Otherwise they might have started
PDF reading: because the worm's excretions provide their
Should be: because the worms' excretions provide their
(?? "worms'" seems more congruent with "their".)
Page 66
PDF reading: … there shouldn’t be a lot of mystery about why the attack does 1D4 damage in a particularly humiliating and unpleasant manor.
Should be: manner
Page 67
PDF reading: Or at least, it’s hosts genotype.
Should be: its (not it is) host's
PDF reading: Mentioning the “fountain of youth” to a biotech firm is a good way to be immediately shown the door, no matter what your credentials.
Should be: Mentioning the “fountain of youth” to a biotech firm is a good way to be immediately shown the door, no matter what your credentials are.
Page 68
PDF reading: day, but the only way to comprehend the life extension
Should be: day, the only way to comprehend the life extension
Page 70
PDF reading: The collected data is review by a computer…
Should be: The collected data is reviewed by a computer…
PDF reading: a situation where others horrors can be
Should be: a situation where other horrors can be
PDF reading: the Worm and PharMethuselah Inc.
Should be: the Worm and PharMethuselah, Inc.
PDF reading: Delta Green will want to probe deeper into what PharMethuselah, Inc. has been doing, while the company will be trying to maintain Delta Green’s cooperation, they will also be trying to conceal the existence of the Farm.
Should be: Delta Green will want to probe deeper into what PharMethuselah, Inc. has been doing; while the company will be trying to maintain Delta Green’s cooperation, they will also be trying to conceal the existence of the Farm.
(?? I have trouble making sense of the clauses of this sentence, but replacing one of the commas with a semicolon might do the trick.)
Page 71
PDF reading: He kills with no more emotion than
Should be: He kills will no more emotion than
Page 72
PDF reading:
Should be:
(The spell list is not properly alphabetized: Call/Dismiss Cthugha and Call/Dismiss Nyogtha need to be moved before Command Serpent and Create Talisman of the Higher Plane needs to be moved before Curse of the Stone.)
PDF reading:
Should be:
("Shrivelling" is sometimes spelled "Shriveling" in this book. Decide on one form and stick to it.)
Page 73
PDF reading:
Should be:
(The spell list for Ibrahim's Chronicle is not properly alphabetized.)
PDF reading: Abdul Alhazred,
Should possibly be: Abd al-Azrad,
(?? The name is often given as "Abd al-Azrad" in CoC.)
PDF reading:
Should be:
(The spell list for The Testament of the Wizard Ssssustchzaal is divided into four columns instead of three.)
Page 74
PDF reading: It is an over statement to say
Should be: It is an overstatement to say
PDF reading: is a common Serpent Men magic,
Should be: is a common Serpent Man magic,
PDF reading: when the creatures true nature
Should be: when the creature's true nature
PDF reading: opens a gate from our dimension our dimension into the
Should be: opens a gate from our dimension into the
PDF reading: open at a gate at one location,
Should be: open a gate at one location,
PDF reading: venom and then and then distills it down
Should be: venom and then distills it down
PDF reading: form. It cost no SAN
Should be: form. It costs no SAN
(NB! This phrase needs to be corrected twice on p. 74.)
Page 73-74
PDF reading: inconsistent spacing used around slashes, e.g. "average 15 weeks to study and comprehend/ 30 hours to skim"
Should be: all extra spaces should be removed
Page 75
PDF reading: the number of Magi points
Should be: the number of Magic points
PDF reading: the caster’s purposes
Should be: the caster’s purposes.
PDF reading: merit in Yig’s Eyes.
Should be: merit in Yig’s eyes.
PDF reading: caster’s body and with it as he sees fit and for as long as he desires
Should be: caster’s body and does with it as he sees fit and for as long as he desires
(Word missing.)
PDF reading: falls to the floor is a deep slumber
Should be: falls to the floor in a deep slumber
PDF reading: Allows the target to be movement points faster and two
Should be:
(Word missing — exactly HOW MANY movement points faster? My guess is "three", based on the fact that the word "three" appears a couple of lines down for no reason at all.)
PDF reading: The procedure involves three hand gestures and mental visualization, requiring and two combat rounds to complete.
Should be: The procedure involves hand gestures and mental visualization, requiring two combat rounds to complete.
Page 76
PDF reading: A Hindu mystic
Should be: Choudhury is a Muslim name
PDF reading: the Mughul Emperor
Should be: the Mughal Emperor
PDF reading: Chandra Chourdhury was
Should be: Chandra Choudhury was
PDF reading: third wife Mumtaz Mahal, back
Should be: third wife, Mumtaz Mahal, back
PDF reading: Chandra Choudury resolved to
Should be: Chandra Choudhury resolved to
Page 77
PDF reading: skills as the strangler.
Should be: skills as a strangler.
PDF reading: Hindustani 110%
Should be: Hindi 99%
(IIRC, 99% is the maximum skill value unless you are a god.) [the language is today usually referred to as Hindi] [ Further comment: To be pedantic, Hindi is not modern Hindustani but is, along with Urdu, a register (a kind of dialect) of Hindustani. It would be appropriate for Choudhury to have Hindi listed instead of Hindustani, but you might consider listing it as Hindi/Urdu: 99%. Also, Choudhury would have used Persian when he was in the Mughal court, all those centuries ago.]
PDF reading: Urdu 110%
Should be: Urdu 99%
(IIRC, 99% is the maximum skill value unless you are a god.)
PDF reading: punch-dagger) 61% damage
Should be: punch-dagger) 61%, damage
Page 78
PDF reading:
Should be:
(Roshan's spell list needs to be properly alphabetized.)
PDF reading:
Should be:
(The paragraph starting with "Sanity Loss Effects:" needs an even right-hand margin.)
PDF reading: English 115%
Should be: English 99%
(Doesn't the rulebook say that 99% is the maximum skill value for a human?)
Page 80
PDF reading: Sword 55% 1D8+db
Should be: Sword 55%, 1D8+db
PDF reading: Oscar Acosta
Should be: Oscar Acosta was the real name of Raoul Duke's (aka Hunter Thompson) companion during the events that inspired "Fear and Loathing in Las Vegas". If this isn't an homage, it might need to be changed.
PDF reading: Languages and Attacks sections
Should be: Extra spaces both before "English" and "Fist/Punch" need to be removed.
Page 81
PDF reading: Thoughout1994
Should be: Throughout 1994
PDF reading: one of the men who aspirations lead
Should be: one of the men who aspired to lead
(??)
Page 80-81
"Attacks" section on these pages do not follow the format used in the rest of the book.
Page 82
PDF reading: … Avery Mitchell was tasked for a Delta Green operation in 1968, the last year Delta Green operated as a legitimate government agency.
Should be: Delta Green carried out Operation LOOKING GLASS on January 18, 1969 (from the short story of the same name in Delta Green: Alien Intelligence), Operation OBSIDIAN in November 1969 (the infamous rogue operation in Cambodia), Delta Green is not investigated by the Joint Chiefs of Staff until the South Vietnamese invasion of Cambodia on April 30, 1970, and Delta Green itself is not disbanded until July 24, 1970. So the date should either probably be reset from 1968 to 1970 (there's no reason for Delta Green to stop operating before the Cambodian invasion) or at least to 1969, as there were still Delta Green operations ongoing till then.
PDF reading: … and he was more interest in pursuing the Disciples…
Should be: … and he was more interested in pursuing the Disciples…
PDF reading: Mitchell hasn't excluded completely, but he is viewed…
Should be: Mitchell hasn't been excluded completely…
PDF reading: Mitchell as made good progress…
Should be: Mitchell has made good progress…
Page 83
PDF reading: of Von Juntz’s Nameless
Should be: of Von Junzt’s Nameless
PDF reading: Friendly Nadjia Fulani.
Should be: Friendly Nadja Fulani.
PDF reading: Friendlies with whom he trusts.
Should be: Friendlies in whom he trusts.
(?? English is not my first language.)
PDF reading: English 100%
Should be: English 99%
(IIRC, it is not possible for humans to reach a higher skill score than 99%.)
Page 85
PDF reading: to fill insatiable appetite
Should be: to fill the insatiable appetite
PDF reading: The DeMonte Clan
Should be: Correct French spelling is "The De Monte Clan". Note that for a specific person, it should be like so: "Antoinette de Monte"
[ Comment: I'm not French, but it seems to be quite possible that DeMonte could be a name from a regional French language. I understand that Demonte is a Burgundian name, or at least a variation of Dumont. The DeMontes could also possibly be originally transplanted Italians, which could make sense if they first emigrated to Cathar lands in the south of France. At any rate, De Monte or Demonte could easily become DeMonte once the family has left France.]
PDF reading: among the New Orleans’
Should be: among New Orleans’
Page 86
PDF reading: Cultes Des Ghoules
Should be: Correct French is either "Culte des Goules" or "Cultes des Goules", depending on the number of cults. Ningauble's comment: The correct title is Cultes des Goules
PDF reading: François Honore-Balfour
Should be: François Honoré-Balfour
(NB! The name is usually given as "François-Honore Balfour" in CoC — a hyphenated given name, not family name.)
Page 87
PDF reading: … ended up filling the pantry of the DeMonte ClanClan.
Should be: … ended up filling the pantry of the DeMonte Clan.
PDF reading: … most of the older members of the DeMonte ClanClan had completed the transformation from human to ghoul.
Should be: … most of the older members of the DeMonte Clan had completed the transformation from human to ghoul.
Page 88
PDF reading: where these family’s ancestors
Should be: where these families’ ancestors
PDF reading: All they had to do is make sure
Should be: All they had to do was make sure
PDF reading: spouse and having siring children
Should be: spouse and siring children
Page 89
PDF reading: As a result, The DeMontes easily
Should be: As a result, the DeMontes easily
PDF reading: Francois Mackandal
Should be: François Mackandal
PDF reading: were more afraid that the
Should be: were more afraid of the
PDF reading: reason. Build in the
Should be: reason. Built in the
Page 90
PDF reading: Traditional underground internment was simply impossible
Should be: Traditional underground interment was simply impossible
PDF reading: the Paris Cemeteries.
Should be: the Paris cemeteries.
PDF reading: would be a very risky
Should be: would be very risky
PDF reading: to twenty six members
Should be: to twenty-six members
PDF reading: And staying close to the city meant feeding in the graveyards, which were not conducive to Clandestine exhumations.
Should be: And staying close to the city meant feeding in the graveyards, which were not conducive to clandestine exhumations.
PDF reading: weaknesses of Hu-Ghouls
Should be: weaknesses of Hu-ghouls
Page 91
PDF reading: pitiable as hu-Ghouls.
Should be: pitiable as Hu-ghouls.
PDF reading: No one, but a Ghoul may read the book, and to ensure that is always so, any human who reads the Ghoul Manuscript…
Should be: No one but a Ghoul
PDF reading: Instead the DeMonte Clan reproduced by taking so-called “natural aristocrats”
Should be: The opening brackets are slightly out of place compared to the paragraph's alignment.
PDF reading: they considered to be humans
Should be: they consider to be humans
(??)
PDF reading: those outlooks and habits of ghouls that the DeMontes considered to be “low”
Should be: The closing brackets are slightly out of place compared to the paragraph's alignment.
PDF reading: the DeMontes access to food
Should be: the DeMontes' access to food
Page 92
PDF reading: routinely subjected waves of
Should be: routinely subjected to waves of
PDF reading: time the city of struck
Should be: time the city was struck
Page 93
Should be: Lots of instances of bolding which probably shouldn't be there
PDF reading: written and ensorcered in the
Should be: written and ensorcelled in the
PDF reading: Vieux Carre
Should be: Vieux Carré
PDF reading: During the 1920s and 1930s, the rest of Louisiana looked up New Orleans with distrust.
Should be: During the 1920s and 1930s, the rest of Louisiana looked upon New Orleans with distrust.
PDF reading: permissive that the eating the dead
Should be: permissive that the eating of the dead
(??)
Page 94
PDF reading: The Realm of Shadows for details). Rebuilding
Should be: The Realm of Shadows for details.) Rebuilding
PDF reading: Since arriving in the New Orleans
Should be: Since arriving in New Orleans
PDF reading: to the reanimation the zombie
Should be: to the reanimation of the zombie
Page 95
PDF reading: in pornography, DeMontes were
Should be: in pornography, the DeMontes were
Page 96
PDF reading: Fish, Jeffery Dahmer,
Should be: Fish, Jeffrey Dahmer,
Page 97
PDF reading: perhaps Deborah Constance could
Should be: perhaps Debra Constance could
Page 99
PDF reading: misdirection, “lost” evidence…
Should be: The opening brackets are slightly out of place compared to the paragraph's alignment.
PDF reading: La Fete du Monde Nouveau
Should be: La Fête du Monde Nouveau
PDF reading: Raymond “Billy-Ray” Weeks
Should be: Raymond “Billy Ray” Weeks
PDF reading: effects in Police Department’s possession
Should be: effects in the Police Department’s possession
PDF reading: Nancy was Jean Qualls Delta Green’s
Should be: Nancy was Jean Qualls, Delta Green’s
Page 100
PDF reading: paid for with credit cards that belong to people who never existed in the first place…
Should be: paid for with credit cards that belonged to people who never existed in the first place…
PDF reading: Delta Green was ready to cut off and cauterized all points of contact.
Should be: Delta Green was ready to cut off and cauterize all points of contact.
PDF reading: any personnel the missing personnel had been in contact with would be notified that that they should treat him as an immediate threat if seen.
Should be: repetition of "that"
(also, "missing personnel" should possibly be "missing person".)
Page 101
PDF reading: in the early1700s and that the original
Should be: in the early 1700s and the original
PDF reading: who sometimes masquerades as Marie Leveaux, the long-dead Voodoo queen of New Orleans
Should be: who sometimes masquerades as Marie Laveau, the long-dead Voodoo queen of New Orleans. (with full stop)
PDF reading: The DeMonte Clan the colony controls many funeral homes;
Should be: either "The De Monte Clan" or "the colony" should be removed to make sense.
PDF reading: neighborhoods guarantying their
Should be: neighborhoods guaranteeing their
Page 102
PDF reading: During the reorganization it occurred to the Marquise that perhaps their enemy was as all-powerful as they suspected. Perhaps it was a rogue operation?
Should be: Context strongly implies " Perhaps their enemy was NOT as all-powerful…."
PDF reading: Until they day he dies, Agent Nolan will spend the rest of his life confined to the psychiatric wing of the Veteran’s Administration Hospital in Boulder, Colorado.
Should be: Agent Nolan will spend the rest of his life confined to the psychiatric wing of the Veteran’s Administration Hospital in Boulder, Colorado.
(tautology — "will spend the rest of his life until the day he dies")
Page 103
PDF reading: to trace their enemy back a Biloxi motel
Should be: to trace their enemy back to a Biloxi motel
PDF reading: Its passage beneath the waves of the Gulf of Mexico went unnoticed, save for the massive “fish-kill”
Should be: The opening brackets are slightly out of place compared to the paragraph's alignment.
PDF reading: LUCK 75% KNOW 85% IDEA 70%
Should be:
(In the other chapters, Luck, Know and Idea are not given for any NPC's. In any case, they are easily calculated. Drop?)
PDF reading: hair worn a ponytail
Should be: hair worn in a ponytail
PDF reading:
Should be:
(All the commas after the percent signs are missing from Nolan’s attacks.)
Page 105
PDF reading: was the almost completely depopulation of
Should be: was the almost complete depopulation of
PDF reading: it took to pumped the water out
Should be: it took to pump the water out
Page 107
PDF reading: giving then two days
Should be: giving them two days
PDF reading: thousand evacuees beingmarooned at
Should be: thousand evacuees being marooned at
Page 108
PDF reading: billion gallons for standing floodwater
Should be: billion gallons of standing floodwater
PDF reading: personnel, 25 Cutters, 44 helicopters
Should be: personnel, 25 cutters, 44 helicopters
(??)
Page 109
PDF reading: Menonite Disaster Service
Should be: Mennonite Disaster Service
Page 110
PDF reading: but the Maquise is resistant to leaving the city she has ruled for over two centuries. Many members of the Clan are grumbling about the Marquisa’s leadership, resentful of this intransigence.
Should be: but the Marquise is resistant to leaving the city she has ruled for over two centuries. Many members of the Clan are grumbling about the Marquise’s leadership, resentful of this intransigence.
PDF reading: 1990s, when the murder rate twelve times
Should be: 1990s, when the murder rate was twelve times
Page 111
PDF reading: But even a three hundred year old
Should be: But even a three-hundred-year-old
Page 112
PDF reading: Scion of the DeMonte Ghoul Clan
Should be:
(Choice of words — "matriarch" or "head" fits better than "scion" perhaps?)
PDF reading: LUCK: 110% KNOW: 100%
Should be: LUCK: 99% KNOW: 99%
(I don't think the rules allow for higher scores than 99% — indeed, I'm not sure Luck is allowed to rise above the initial POW x 5 score.)
PDF reading:
Should be:
(The commas after the percent signs are missing from almost all of Antoinette's attacks. Also, the specification of weapon should be moved to after the damage score — cf. p. 80 and p. 81)
PDF reading: French 100%
Should be: French 99%
(See my earlier objections to 100% scores.)
PDF reading: Contact Deity/ Loa
Should be: Contact Deity/Loa
(Needs to be corrected on several subsequent pages.)
PDF reading: Cultes des Ghoules, La Fete du Monde Nouveau, The DeMonte Grimoire
Should be: Cultes des Goules, La Fête du Monde Nouveau, The DeMonte Grimoire
Page 113
PDF reading: The Marquisa’s obsession
Should be: The Marquise’s obsession
Page 114
PDF reading: It was written shortly after coming to New Orleans
Should be: It was written shortly after their coming to New Orleans
PDF reading: transformation into Ghouls.
Should be: transformation into ghouls.
PDF reading: about the Ghoul manuscript and
Should be: about the Ghoul Manuscript and
PDF reading: 1 Weeks to Study and Comprehend, 8 hours to skim
Should be: average 1 week to study and comprehend/8 hours to skim
(several corrections)
PDF reading: skim; Contains the following Spells:
Should be: skim. Contains the following spells:
(two corrections)
PDF reading: study and comprehend/ 90 hours
Should be: study and comprehend/90 hours
Page 115
PDF reading: Know 100%
Should be: Know 99%
(See above for my objections to 100% scores.)
PDF reading:
Should be:
(Commas missing from after the percent signs for Claudette's attacks.)
Page 116
PDF reading: French 100%
Should be: French 99%
(See above for my objections to 100% scores.)
Page 117
PDF reading: Know 105%
Should be: Know 99%
PDF reading:
Should be:
(Commas missing from after the percent signs for Martin's attacks.)
PDF reading: English 100%
Should be: English 99%
PDF reading: French 105%
Should be: French 99%
Page 118
PDF reading:
Should be:
(There is a superfluous "Enchant", between "Enchant Gris-Gris" and "Enchant Ju-Ju".)
PDF reading: He had been expelled from the University of Bologna in 1852 for dissecting stolen human cadavers.
Should be: Based on the context, this should be earlier than 1806 and probably be 1752.
PDF reading: he had well-known reputation
Should be: he had a well-known reputation
PDF reading: Arriving in New Orleans 1809, Luko was still getting his bearings when he discovered that he was not the only sorcerer in the city.
Should be: Arriving in New Orleans in 1809, Luko was still getting his bearings when he discovered that he was not the only sorcerer in the city.
PDF reading: but had not had been forced to share
Should be: but had not been forced to share
PDF reading: regaining the Ghoul Manuscript. His
Should be: regaining the Ghoul Manuscript. His
PDF reading: god, Yibb-Tsll, lives
Should be: god, Yibb-Tstll, lives
(Needs to be corrected in several places from this page on.)
Page 119
PDF reading: These acolytes, calling themselves “the Circle,”
Should be: The opening brackets are slightly out of place compared to the paragraph's alignment.
PDF reading: …the Marquisa's Right Hand
Should be: …the Marquise's Right Hand
PDF reading: LUCK 100% KNOW 105%
Should be: LUCK 99% KNOW 99%
PDF reading:
Should be:
(Commas missing from after percent signs on Luc's attacks.)
PDF reading: Drive carriage 32%
Should be: Drive Carriage 32%
PDF reading: Croatian 105%
Should be: Croatian 99%
PDF reading: Mythos Tomes: The Gundulic Grimoire
Should be: Mythos Tomes: The Gundulic Grimoire
PDF reading: and a strangely course and pock marked
Should be: and a strangely coarse and pockmarked
PDF reading: and comprehend/ 78 hours
Should be: and comprehend/78 hours
PDF reading: he would know to protect the spell
Should be: he would know how to protect the spell
Page 120
PDF reading: parents in1919, she fled
Should be: parents in 1919, she fled
PDF reading: men who wouldn’t support
Should be: men who would support
Page 121
PDF reading: the DeMonte’s ambassador
Should be: the DeMontes’ ambassador
PDF reading: IDEA 75%
Should be: IDEA 65%
PDF reading:
Should be:
(Commas missing from after percent signs on Eliza's attacks.)
PDF reading:
Should be:
(Commas missing from after percent signs on Billy Ray's attacks.)
Page 123
PDF reading: Also known as the Sixth-Sathlatta.
Should be: Also known as the Sixth Sathlatta.
(This needs to be corrected in more than one place.)
PDF reading: the year this may vary between calendars)
Should be: the year (this may vary between calendars)
PDF reading: points. Yibb-Tssl can
Should be: points. Yibb-Tstll can
(Also note that "Yibb-Tstll" is almost consistently misspelled as "Yibb-Tsll" in the book.)
PDF reading: in the creation give the barrier
Should be: in the creation gives the barrier
(??)
PDF reading: in the Necronomicon, the
Should be: in the Necronomicon, the
PDF reading: Black is said to “liveth apart from Him and eateth souls.”
Should be: Black is said to “live apart from Him and eat souls.”
(Congruence error — after "to", the infinitive is needed.)
Page 127
PDF reading: NWMP
Should be: The North-West Mounted Police (NWMP) became the Royal North-West Mounted Police (RNWMP) in 1904.
Page 128
PDF reading: Cold Harbor
Should be: Cold Harbour [Canada uses British-style spellings; place names in an English-speaking country should always be spelt in English as that country spells them]
PDF reading: from the Nineteenth Century, as
Should be: from the nineteenth century, as
(??)
PDF reading: some of who were now
Should be: some of whom were now
Page 129
PDF reading: threat was real, spread
Should be: threat was real; spread
Page 130
PDF reading: from “the Manitobans”, “Mystery Section” to the “Murder Squad”.
Should be. from “the Manitobans” and the “Mystery Section” to the “Murder Squad”.
PDF reading: backgrounds and no had concept
Should be: backgrounds and had no concept
PDF reading: Among Lawton’s possessions was a journal that recorded Lawton’s journey to
Should be: Among Lawton’s possessions was a journal that recorded his journey to
(?? Unnecessary to refer to Lawton's name twice?)
Page 131
PDF reading: from the late-1770s to the
Should be: from the late 1770s to the
PDF reading: Sachs Harbor, Northwest Territory
Should be: Sachs Harbour, Northwest Territories
PDF redaing: which described of a deadly predator
Should be: which described a deadly predator
PDF reading: …appears to halt the phenomena
Should be: …appears to halt the phenomenon
Page 132
PDF reading: following 15 hour siege Snowfox
Should be: following 15-hour siege Snowfox
PDF reading: Shag Harbor
Should be: Shag Harbour
Page 134
PDF reading: declining in heath,
Should be: declining in health,
Page 135
(The formatting for the descriptions of the mythos tomes differs from that in the preceding chapters. Change?)
PDF reading: Legatt’s Mysteries of the Worm
Should be: Leggett’s Mysteries of the Worm
(The name needs to be corrected on the next line too.)
PDF reading: Contact Diety
Should be: Contact Deity
(Needs to be corrected twice on the same line.)
Page 136
PDF reading: Close to hour of chanting, a
Should be: Close to one hour of chanting, a
PDF reading: they instantly become a Child of the Wendigo and instructed by Ithaqua
Should be: they instantly become a Child of the Wendigo and are instructed by Ithaqua
Page 137
PDF reading: an archaeological team to recover more artifacts from the mine (see sidebar).
Should be: I cannot locate the referenced sidebar.
PDF reading: The shaman was later debriefed by M-EPIC about Inuit legend detailing the Lomarians attempted to steal…
Should be: The shaman was later debriefed by M-EPIC about Inuit legends detailing how the Lomarians attempted to steal…
PDF reading: the remains of the previous owner was found in the nearby sewers
Should be: the remains of the previous owner were found in the nearby sewers
PDF reading: Remains of several the rat creatures were kept for further study.
Should be: Remains of several of the rat creatures were kept for further study. ; or: Remains of several rat creatures were kept for further study.
PDF reading: topic due to success
Should be: topic due to the success
Page 138
PDF reading: Canadian Security and Intelligence Service
Should be: Canadian Security Intelligence Service
PDF reading: the federal government set-up the McDonald Commission in 1977
Should be: the federal government set up the McDonald Commission in 1977
Page 139
PDF reading: M-EPIC has learnt to adapt and more rapidly adapt to changing circumstances.
Should be: ??
(Please check this sentence.)
Page 140
PDF reading: highest-ranking civil servant administers
Should be: highest-ranking civil servant, administers
Page 142
PDF reading: are GPS–equipped
Should be: are GPS-equipped
(It can't be shown here, but it appears that there is a dash in the text instead of a hyphen.)
PDF reading: Communication Security Establishment
Should be: Communications Security Establishment
PDF reading: until this hypothetical system goes online, they far more limited.
Should be: until this hypothetical system goes online, they are far more limited.
Page 144
PDF reading: If the office is too small, and it will be, unless its head office or a regional office,
Should be: If the office is too small, and it will be, unless it's head office or a regional office,
PDF reading: However don’t be dismayed by outrageous expenses claims
Should be: However don’t be dismayed by outrageous expense claims
Page 145
PDF reading: Failures often lead to disciplinary measures unless it’s politically expedient not to so, or an entire team was eliminated from the
field
Should be: Failures often lead to disciplinary measures unless it’s politically expedient not to do so, or an entire team was eliminated from the field
(??)
PDF reading: the traditional ideas of paranormal
Should be: the traditional ideas of the paranormal
(??)
PDF reading: Temple of the Four Winds is Hyperborean
Should be: Temple of the Winds is Hyperborean
Page 146
PDF reading: been aware M-EPIC and its
Should be: been aware of M-EPIC and its
PDF reading: Lady Rittingham’s
Should be: the Duchess of Staffordshire's
(As I pointed out when proofing DG:CD, Marjorie Rittingham can't be "Lady Rittingham" since "Rittingham" is not her title, it is her family name. She was "Lady Marjorie Rittingham" ("Lady" in front of her given name) until she inherited the title as Duchess of Staffordshire. She should be referred to as "the Duchess of Staffordshire" or "Staffordshire", but "Lady Rittingham" is completely impossible. It would be like referring to the Duke of Wellington as "Lord Wellesley".)
(NB! This needs to be corrected on subsequent pages as well.)
Page 147
PDF reading: disposing of its victim’s bodies.
Should be: disposing of its victims’ bodies.
PDF reading: Singh’s debriefing indentified the aliens’ ability to pass through human craniums unaffected.
Should be: Singh’s debriefing identified the aliens’ ability to pass through human craniums unaffected.
Page 148
PDF reading: With end of the Reagan-Bush
Should be: With the end of the Reagan-Bush
PDF reading: M-EPIC remain uninformed as to who the men are working for
Should be: M-EPIC remained uninformed as to who the men are working for
(Ningauble's comment: I'm not sure this is a valid correction.)
Page 150
The skill list for Alsion Clark needs to be properly alphabetized; Psychoanalysis moved after Psychology
PDF reading: this characters’ influence on
Should be: this character’s influence on
PDF reading: screenings increased to from annual to quarterly reviews
Should be: screenings increased from annual to quarterly reviews
Page 151
PDF reading: He has no idea that his failure to establish lasting personal relationships, or that his obsessive materialism, or that his belief in his own invulnerability are pathological.
Should be: He has no idea that his failure to establish lasting personal relationships, or his obsessive materialism, or his belief in his own invulnerability, are pathological.
Page 152
PDF reading: English 100% (own)
Should be: English 99% (own)
(Language list also needs to be alphabetized.)
Page 153
"Fast" in "Fast Talk" in Singh's skill list needs to be moved down to the next line.
The skill list needs to be alphabetized.
"Physical Description" and "Indefinite Insanity" sections probably need to have their right-hand margins straightened.
Page 154
PDF reading: until it finally it appeared
Should be: until finally it appeared
(or "until it finally appeared")
Lane's skill list needs to be alphabetized.
"Physical Description" and "Indefinite Insanity" sections need to change places with each other.
Page 155
PDF reading: copy of Leggatt’s Mysteries of
Should be: copy of Leggett’s Mysteries of
Page 156
PDF reading: English 100% (own) French 100%
Should be: English 99% (own) French 99%
PDF reading: failure), Obessiveness
Should be: failure), Obsessiveness
PDF reading: N'Kaian Statue
Should be: N'kaian Statue
PDF reading: and weight nearly
Should be: and weighs nearly
PDF reading: ago in N’Kai and came to the Earth’s surface by way of K’n-Yan.
Should be: ago in N’kai and came to the Earth’s surface by way of K’n-yan.
(This is how Lovecraft writes these names. Change in the text where necessary.)
Page 157
Titles of books written with bold type in section "Store's Mythos Documents"; needs to be italicized only.
PDF reading: Mythos Gain: +13
Should be: Mythos Gain: +13
PDF reading: (Contact Deity/ Yibb-Tsill)
Should be: (Contact Deity/Yibb-Tstll)
(NB! Space after slash and misspelled "Tstll".)
PDF reading: twenty-one-year old Turcotte
Should be: twenty-one-year-old Turcotte
Page 158
PDF reading: But he could have been Assistant Director of Intelligence…
Should be: He could have been Assistant Director of Intelligence…
Turcotte's skill list needs to be alphabetized.
PDF reading: …even during as Ontario Regional Director
Should be: …even as Ontario Regional Director
Page 159
PDF reading: Loranger appears and disappears throughout the 19th and 20th centuries
Should be: Loranger appeared and disappeared throughout the 19th and 20th centuries
Page 160
PDF reading: But Hegedus hasn’t survived for over 400 years by going it alone.
Should be: But Hegedus hasn’t survived for over 400 years by going through it alone.
PDF reading: Dr. Richad Store
Should be: Dr. Richard Store
Page 161
PDF reading: Store’s confidence, Hedgedus allowed himself
Should be: Store’s confidence, Hegedus allowed himself
PDF reading: copy of Leggatt’s Mysteries
Should be. copy of Leggett’s Mysteries
Hegedus' scores in Arabic, Magyar and Turkish should probably be reduced to 99%.
"Permanent Insanity" and "Physical Description" sections should be switched around.
Page 162
PDF reading: Commission des Répercussions Environnementales de la Politique
Should be: Ministère de l'environnement, Commission d'étude sur les répercussions des politiques environnementales
(I added "Ministère de l'environnement" to reflect the original english name. The translation was too literal and did not make sense. Acronym is now CERPE in French.)
PDF reading: by the CEPA 1999.
Should be: by the CEPA in 1999.
PDF reading: Sample Character
Should be: extra space should be removed before "Sample Character".
Page 163
The sample character has the same name as the sample character on p. 162. Intentional?
Page 167
PDF reading: Andre de Tours
Should be: André de Tours
Page 168
PDF reading: EMINENCES GRISE
Should be: EMINENCES GRISES
(I'm not sure which grammatical rules apply for imported words in english, and if the French expression éminence grise (singular form) even counts as such an imported word, but in french both words of the group take an s in the plural form…)
Page 172
PDF reading: Six men of these men
Should be: Six of these men
PDF reading: Even then, you won’t really be in the mansion, because its not really here.
Should be: Even then, you won’t really be in the mansion, because it's not really here.
PDF reading: The “Puzzle Box,” as the manor was called, would not be unraveled until the Alta Vendita embraced the teachings of P’Dwahr M’Ankanon Nyarlathotep .
Should be: The “Puzzle Box,” as the manor was called, would not be unraveled until the Alta Vendita embraced the teachings of P’Dwahr M’Ankanon Nyarlathotep. (extra space before full stop; no italicization of the title of the book)
Page 173
PDF reading: When the Masters have input at all, it’s not discussed or prioritized: The Bishops just adapt to it.
Should be: When the Masters have input at all, it’s not discussed or prioritized: the Bishops just adapt to it.
PDF reading: However, being chosen to perform the Greater Marriage is not always the victory it appears: Rumor has it that the remaining Bishops…
Should be: However, being chosen to perform the Greater Marriage is not always the victory it appears: rumor has it that the remaining Bishops…
Page 174
PDF reading: than some sort overreaching mastermind.
Should be: than some sort of overreaching mastermind.
Page 175
PDF reading: John Tyler Ringo
Should be: John Tyler Oringo
Page 175
PDF reading: Andre de Tours
Should be: André de Tours
Page 178
PDF reading: Andre de Tours (and several times "Andre")
Should be: André de Tours (and "André")
Language list probably should be alphabetized.
Page 179
Language lists should probably be alphabetized.
Page 181
Language lists should probably be alphabetized.
PDF reading: French 100%
Should possibly be: French 99%
(unless the Transcended Masters count as godlike, which is entirely possible.)
PDF reading: A chance encounter with the ancestral library of the Comtes d’Erlette …
Should be: A chance encounter with the ancestral library of the Comte d’Erlette …
(Ningauble's comment: I beg to differ. "Comtes d'Erlette" refers to the family, hence to the ancestral library of the family the head of which bears the title "Comte d'Erlette" — would that be an actual error?)
Page 183
PDF reading: Andre de Tours
Should be: André de Tours
Page 185
PDF reading: French King in Yellow.
Should be: French King in Yellow.
PDF reading: Georg Reuter, 1936.
Should be: Georg Reuter Fischer, 1936.
Page 186
Right column is not levelled with left column (it has two extra lines at the top).
PDF reading: pulpy grey mass
Should be: pulpy gray mass
(?? "Gray" is used earlier.)
Page 189
PDF reading: English 100%
Should possibly be: English 99%
(99% is maximum skill score for humans. Applicable in this case?)
Page 191
PDF reading: 26 year old Indian man
Should be: 26-year-old Indian man
Page 192
PDF reading: Lionel Glass has a degree in Accounting, taken in the 19th century
Should be: Degrees in Accounting didn't exist until the 20th century. He would probably have some sort of arts degree (e.g. Modern History, Classics) or a law degree. The first professional body for (and thus recognition of) the accountancy profession in London was the Institute of Accountants, founded in 1870. Before that accountants were generally just lower-middle-class bookkeepers, not qualified professionals or people who could afford to go to university. Even after that, Chartered Accountants qualified on the job (taking exams set by the Institute) and not at university until relatively recently (and indeed still can).
PDF reading: Mombassa
Should be: Mombasa
Page 193
Language list should be alphabetized.
Page 195
Natural History and Poison are erroneously listed in a fourth column.
Spell list needs to be alphabetized.
Right-hand column is much shorter than left-hand one.
+++Page 196
Skill list needs to be alphabetized.
Language list needs to be alphabetized.
Page 198
Language list needs to be alphabetized.
Page 199
PDF reading: can bite scaly bits of skin off his on wrinkled knees
Should be: can bite scaly bits of skin off his wrinkled knees
Page 201
Drive and Hide are erroneously listed in a fourth column.
Language list should be alphabetized.
PDF reading: Sea navigation
Should be: Sea Navigation
Page 201-202
Skill list needs to be alphabetized.
Page 202
Language list needs to be alphabetized.
Zewami's language list needs to be alphabetized.
Wrong indentation on the right side of the second-to-last paragraph.
Page 203
PDF reading: Andre de Tours
Should be: André de Tours
Page 205
PDF reading: Andre de Tours
Should be: André de Tours
Page 215
PDF reading: Class and wealth are have such clear winners and losers that the roles of the envied…
Should be: Class and wealth have such clear winners and losers that the roles of the envied…
Page 216
PDF reading: Each false-front charity that acts as a financial conduit is fragile by design: Under investigation…
Should be: Each false-front charity that acts as a financial conduit is fragile by design: under investigation…
Page 230
PDF reading: Prince Edward Albert Victor
Should be: Presumably should be Prince Albert Victor [i.e. the Duke of Clarence; his father, the Prince of Wales, was Prince Edward]
PDF reading: …members of the Dorian Grey Society began walking the Road of Souls
Should be: …members of the Dorian Gray Society began walking the Road of Souls
PDF reading: Furthermore, without the Dorian Grey Society…
Should be: Furthermore, without the Dorian Gray Society…
Page 232
PDF reading: copy of The King in Yellow.
Should be: copy of The King in Yellow.
Page 233
PDF reading: poison of the King in Yellow into their
Should be: poison of The King in Yellow into their
(Unless it refers to the entity, not the play)
PDF reading: to introduce the King in Yellow as a
Should be: to introduce The King in Yellow as a
Unless it refers to the entity, not the play.)
PDF reading: …around "Carmina Burana."
Should be: …around Carmina Burana. [italicised; it's a complete work]
PDF reading: when they bother were students.
Should be: when they both were students
Page 234
PDF reading: …Neitzsche’s Übermensch concepts
Should be: …Nietzsche’s Übermensch concepts
PDF reading: Le Sodalité Bacchante
Should be: La Sodalité Bacchante
Page 237, others
PDF reading: Angelo Hidalto
Should be: This is a minor quibble, but this is a very unlikely name for a Spanish or Italian missionary. For a Spanish origin, a similar sounding and fairly common alternative would be A+ngel Hidalgo
Page 238
PDF reading: It is the Teachers who actually administrate the waking world aspects…
Should be: It is the Teachers who actually administer the waking world aspects…
Page 239
PDF reading: "World of Warcraft"
Should be: World of Warcraft [italicised]
Page 241
PDF reading: The best explanation would be that works on anti-gravity principles.
Should be: /The best explanation would be that it works on anti-gravity principles.
Page 243
PDF reading: Despite the fact that the inner core of HELP has hope for and belief in a better future, it is a better future t delivered not by people, but by the “good aliens.”
Should be: Despite the fact that the inner core of HELP has hope for and belief in a better future, it is a better future to be delivered, not by people, but by the “good aliens.”
Page 246
PDF reading: …the city in Suffolk
Should be: …the town in Suffolk [Dunwich didn't have a cathedral and was therefore not a city]
[ Comment: It was granted a royal charter though, which is another definition of a city.] [ Further comment: No, it was chartered as a borough, which is not the same thing at all; most English boroughs are not cities. That requires a further charter and before the 19th century every city was home to a cathedral.] [ Further further comment: You're right, it never received a charter to be a city. However, just to make the Dunwich Group's pessimism more poignant, Dunwich did have a cathedral though the diocese apparently folded in the 9th century.]
PDF reading: when Republicans aren’t in power they they rage against Democrat wimp-outs or obsessively track Sarah Palin’s plane travel.
Should be: when Republicans aren’t in power they rage against Democrat wimp-outs or obsessively track Sarah Palin’s plane travel.
Page 247
PDF reading: The climax of Martines’ rule was an alchemical Ordre du Flamel op…
Should be: The climax of Martines’ rule was an alchemical Ordre de Flamel op… (probably; can't find a reference to an Order of Nicolas Flamel anywhere)
Page 252
PDF reading: Their headquarters is in Perth…
Should be: Their headquarters are in Perth…
Page 275
PDF reading: Agents warn Senators about book.
Should be: Agents warn Senators about the book.
Page 290
PDF reading: olls and ranged attacks
Should be: rolls and ranged attacks
Page 302
The line starting "Gain one flashback" should be indented and the phrase should be bold, as on the preceding two lines.
Page 316
PDF reading: a task which many in the organization believe is sysiphean in scope.
Should be: a task which many in the organization believe is sisyphean in scope.
(Shouldn't it be *S*isyphean?)